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5 Responses to “Does this seem intelligent and make you want to read the book? What do you think?”
Isabelle Lee Has A Problem.
It is a problem that many girls and some guys go through. Isabelle has an eating disorder called Bulimia Nervosa where the person stuffs herself with food and then makes herself vomit (“bingeing” and “purging”). The loss of her dad and other kinds of things that teenagers go through triggered Isabell’s disorder. Isabelle’s mom found out what she was doing from her sister April (“Ape Face” to Isabelle) and now makes her attend “Group” once a week. When Isabelle attends her first meeting she is surprised to see the most popular girl in school, Ashley Barnum. Isabelle and Ashley soon become friends and are bingeing and purging together. Join Isabelle on her horrific and life threatening journey as she tries to deal with a depressed mother, the loss of her dad, and struggling with bulimia. This book shows what many girls are going through and how hard a time they have. It also sets an excellent example of dealing with bulimia. “Perfect” has terrific information in the back of the book explaining eating disorders and some places to get help. If you are looking for a book with a valuable lesson, interesting facts, how teenage girls struggle to be “perfect,” and struggles of one teenage girl, this is your book. Open “Perfect” and be amazed.
I would mention the title of the book earlier in the review. As it is written I thought, “Isabelle Lee has a Problem” was the title of the book.
Maybe you should start out with your first line and add a phrase like “Her problem is laid out in the book “Perfect.”
In this sentence:
“Isabelle lost her dad and this and other kinds of things that other teenagers go through triggered this.”
Has one “and” too many. It should be; Isabelle lost her dad, this and other kinds of…
In this sentence:
“If you are looking for a book with a valuable lesson, interesting facts, how teenage girls struggle to be “perfect,” and struggles of one teenage girl, this is your book. Open “Perfect” and be amazed.”
I would suggest: If you are looking or a book with valuable lessons…
Then: …interesting facts on how…
Then to be “perfect,” and the struggles…
Then: Open “Perfect” and learn.
Another words: “If you are looking for a book with valuable lessons, interesting facts on how teenage girls struggle to be “perfect,” and struggles of one teenage girl, this is your book. Open “Perfect” and be amazed.”
Lesson should be plural. The word “on” turns the subject onto the word “how.” I think that it should be “and the struggles…” because you are not using this second “struggle” as a verb. And I don’t like the word amazed. It should be should, informed or learn. You want the reader to read the book not just for the story, but for the lessons at the end.
Overall it is a good blurb or review for the book “Perfect.”
It is true that the blurb could be shorter, but I don’t mind the length and I have seen blurbs on the dust jacket of a book with such a length as you have in yours.
November 2nd, 2009 at 3:55 am
Aaron Kropp
That is WAY too long to be a blurb. (if thats what you are trying to write).
November 5th, 2009 at 5:02 am
Eunice Neilson
it’s great- just a little long.
November 7th, 2009 at 7:41 am
Allen Harwell
Here is a corrected version for you:
Isabelle Lee Has A Problem.
It is a problem that many girls and some guys go through. Isabelle has an eating disorder called Bulimia Nervosa where the person stuffs herself with food and then makes herself vomit (“bingeing” and “purging”). The loss of her dad and other kinds of things that teenagers go through triggered Isabell’s disorder. Isabelle’s mom found out what she was doing from her sister April (“Ape Face” to Isabelle) and now makes her attend “Group” once a week. When Isabelle attends her first meeting she is surprised to see the most popular girl in school, Ashley Barnum. Isabelle and Ashley soon become friends and are bingeing and purging together. Join Isabelle on her horrific and life threatening journey as she tries to deal with a depressed mother, the loss of her dad, and struggling with bulimia. This book shows what many girls are going through and how hard a time they have. It also sets an excellent example of dealing with bulimia. “Perfect” has terrific information in the back of the book explaining eating disorders and some places to get help. If you are looking for a book with a valuable lesson, interesting facts, how teenage girls struggle to be “perfect,” and struggles of one teenage girl, this is your book. Open “Perfect” and be amazed.
November 10th, 2009 at 12:20 am
Maureen Solberg
I think it is an excellent start.
I would mention the title of the book earlier in the review. As it is written I thought, “Isabelle Lee has a Problem” was the title of the book.
Maybe you should start out with your first line and add a phrase like “Her problem is laid out in the book “Perfect.”
In this sentence:
“Isabelle lost her dad and this and other kinds of things that other teenagers go through triggered this.”
Has one “and” too many. It should be; Isabelle lost her dad, this and other kinds of…
In this sentence:
“If you are looking for a book with a valuable lesson, interesting facts, how teenage girls struggle to be “perfect,” and struggles of one teenage girl, this is your book. Open “Perfect” and be amazed.”
I would suggest: If you are looking or a book with valuable lessons…
Then: …interesting facts on how…
Then to be “perfect,” and the struggles…
Then: Open “Perfect” and learn.
Another words: “If you are looking for a book with valuable lessons, interesting facts on how teenage girls struggle to be “perfect,” and struggles of one teenage girl, this is your book. Open “Perfect” and be amazed.”
Lesson should be plural. The word “on” turns the subject onto the word “how.” I think that it should be “and the struggles…” because you are not using this second “struggle” as a verb. And I don’t like the word amazed. It should be should, informed or learn. You want the reader to read the book not just for the story, but for the lessons at the end.
Overall it is a good blurb or review for the book “Perfect.”
It is true that the blurb could be shorter, but I don’t mind the length and I have seen blurbs on the dust jacket of a book with such a length as you have in yours.
November 12th, 2009 at 2:52 pm
Steve Kang
I think it’s very well wrote. I would leave it.